WTF sam?! - MC NS(freestyle)

http://www.4shared.com/file/167209832/3ba60e8c/WTF_Sam_-_MC_NS.html

here's a freestyle.. against mc sam.. hes whack, and i dissrespect him.. because he doesnt have respect 4 younger mcs.. feedbacks pls

sam who the fuck are you? // your music sucks like ''korn'' dude
you fuck girls ''lyrically on Facebook // i fuck girls really, you can see my vid on ''porntube''
i'm 17 your 22
but your so whack // mc sam's the gorilla of youtube jumpin on his bed
i'm the reddevil spittin fire like a dargon bringin Death // Your, your worst nightmare // you aint got any swag
5yrs older than me but i dont have any respect(for you)
5years older than me // dissin him in free
yeah, thats my style ruinin the wall // your new track recorded in a mental hospital
you sed comin back in a while // haha, shit // you dissapeared
haira gesos har har // on DR you dissed skibkhan man your so mad
i heard your first track and i sed BLAH!
this is the end nigga// dont post any shit bcoz my shit is bigga
everybody knows you ill // didnt respect me now ya paying the bill
you aint got any skills //
your begining was yelling on techno// i'd begin on tupacs beats bro!
you call me KID from bangladesh // i call you motherfucker spittin trash // man, im spittin cash
you scream on the mic/ im in italy gettin high
you know 2 languages im spittin in 4 without slippin// any rhyme...
wtf am i doing? // just wasting my time // its 2009
Uncle beat me // before you consider yourself MC

no feeds?

couldnt listen to it all...a diss needs to be aggresive and on point n it sounded like u were struggling..

need to improve a lot

F.L.O. wrote:couldnt listen to it all...a diss needs to be aggresive and on point n it sounded like u were struggling..

agreed.

ur accent got issues..it sounds a bit 'funny' not in a funny way..nothing wrong w/ that..but for dissing track..that accent isn't good.

thnks 4 the feeds bro's i'll improve but i think it came out like this because im tryin to learn freestylin in english...