"Tomake Chara" By Wafi [Download now!!]

alright I've made another track check it out and tell me what you people think...

http://www.4shared.com/audio/mhuaDerd/Wafi-Tomake_chara.html
here are the lyrics

Verse one

janina bujhina koto shunno kotha je bole
koto je sriti amar ei faka moner maje je pore
tumi to dure amake chere reke ghela
ei rokter bheja koshte eka eka
hoitoba akdin abar hobe shei dheka
hoitoba janina manina kichu bujhina
ei prithibite ar thakte chaina
mrittur dine gune gune ar disha paina
ei akash
tomake chara
koto je
faka
ei akash
tomake chara
koto je
hotasha
kobe amar kotha tomar mone porbe
guro guro tarar brishti akash theke pore
tumi to chila amar ei moner shanti
hotashar spondone ondhokarer majhe bhashi

Hook x2
tumito tumito
kache ar nai nai
amito tomake chara
mrittur dike jai
tumito tumito
amake rekhegela
amar shudu roeghelo ei oshojjokor betha

Verse 2

tomaka chara shob kichu laghe faka
tumi chile ondhokarer ekti matro tara
kije hobe amar ekhon ta pura ojana
ami roeghelam ei ondho koshter chetona
ei shunno ratri gulo katie eka eka
achi ami ei koshte bheja bheja
tomake to ei prithibita kere nilo
tomar mrittu ekti faka jaegha die ghelo
asha kori kotha gulo ke shunte parcho
tomake chara ami ei hotashae chonchol
ochol chetona theke osthir ei konto
ei kalo shishir alor majhe bajae chondo
bheja meghe lukano thake sriti gulo
tomar wada obosshoi puron korbo
tomar kota jorie dhore kache rakbo
ei akashei ekdnin abar tomake pabo

i donno whether it was the mastering but the vocal dB was too loud... level it with the beat nex time.
i c u finally understood what I was talking about with BARS and words. great improvement on that. u learn fast.

Flow and everythn was on par. the only things i'd suggest are:
- level the vocal dB with the beat so that it's balanced
- Don't try to finish a verse in one breat. record 2 or even 1 bar at one go (per breath). because exhausted out the flow at the end of the verses and ur breath can be heard.
- And this is just my opinion... i think the shuddho bangla was good bt u shud also try normal bangla s in the way we talk every day... u kno....

Keep up the good work ur improvin MashAllah...

TheRiddler wrote:
i c u finally understood what I was talking about with BARS and words. great improvement on that. u learn fast.

Thanks man..It means a lot to me...

TheRiddler wrote:
- level the vocal dB with the beat so that it's balanced

Now it's fixed I've remastered it...the link is now updated..

TheRiddler wrote:
- Don't try to finish a verse in one breat. record 2 or even 1 bar at one go (per breath). because exhausted out the flow at the end of the verses and ur breath can be heard.

Ok next time I'll try with flow that is less strained...

TheRiddler wrote:
- And this is just my opinion... i think the shuddho bangla was good bt u shud also try normal bangla s in the way we talk every day... u kno....

Ok next time I'll try something different...

am not an expart but i fink the hook was realy nicly exucated!
unlike ur last track the barz are now even, as ther is less words! keep it up bro! good work!

Trickstar wrote:am not an expart but i fink the hook was realy nicly exucated!
unlike ur last track the barz are now even, as ther is less words! keep it up bro! good work!

Thanks man!!!
More feeds please...let me know how I suck and stuff so that next time I'll do better...

the 2nd verse was a lot better than the first chorus was quite good, kinda sooting, and i also lyk the panning and autotune effects mixing was okay, not bad also the verses had good effects on em', and the flow was pretty good not bad brigga

but there WERE some flaws -
1) the flow on the first verse was caught at places, too many words in a single bar i guess..:\...
2) the vocals level was a bit too high at places
3) tomr shur ektu off gesilo at places in the first verse
4) try recording in a few attempts not just 1, tahole breath utbe na n u all have an easier tym and better tym recording

ZX l)@ G@lvl3r wrote:the 2nd verse was a lot better than the first chorus was quite good, kinda sooting, and i also lyk the panning and autotune effects mixing was okay, not bad also the verses had good effects on em', and the flow was pretty good not bad brigga

thanks boy...apreciate it...and next I'll do better with a less strained flow so that there won't breathing problem or stuff...mixing of this song anyway was really bad I think couse I aplied the compression ver very badly...next time I'll do better...thanks...

I Want Ak's comment too!!!!