[[SOLO TRACK]] Solitude_____DEMONIC

Chk this out ppl...worked very hard on this
track.....spent a lot of time figurin out the hooks and
verses....i hope u guys wud lyk it ...

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HOOKS: x 2

I'll be standin in the crowd
Wit them ppl all around
From the cacophany and the sound
To the chaos all around
It seems as if i wud drown
In the misery of this
Dead town

VERSE:

all alone on my own/
lyk a deadly syndrome/
frm tyms of bein in da crowd/
to bein in solitude/
i wud and i shud/
i only i wish dat i cud/
trust ppl and heck/
wish i cud change dat/
but u c errytym i do/
i get beat back/
the impact/
of the low blow whacks/
seems to hit lyk smacks/
the hacks dat i meet/
the wacks dat i beat/
on the tracks dat i feed/
to the facts dat i read/
don seem to fade away/
the pain only seems to increase and shit/
don wanna think abt dis bullshit no mo/
r u jst waitin fo/
me to pack up n go?/

yo.../
don worry bro/
wat wud i leave the game fo/
feel the beat hit ur bone/
lyk cfc eatin up ozone/
i beat u up/
on ur own zone/
on ur own front yard/
dat u keep on claimin/
didnt play the card/
dat i wanted to.../

cuz if i did/
it wud hitchu/
between the eyes/
n sho u fo real/
all ur lies/
n the reason/
y i despise/
u in the first place/
check the heat of the track/
its first rate/
n y'all be faded/
don mean no hate/

ur rhymes precipitate
as they hit/
they'r wack/
wile mine diseminate/
as they fit/
the track/
its not ma fault ppl listen 2 me/
try as hard as u mite/
u can nevr be me/
cuz u c/
imitatin can only take this far/
curse words can only fill up 4 bars/
True skills remains in the fact/
If u can take ur game beyond that/


HOOKS: x 2

I'll be standin in the crowd
Wit them ppl all around
From the cacophany and the sound
To the chaos all around
It seems as if i wud drown
In the misery of this
Dead town
_____________x_________________________

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I like your signature. "DEMONIC".
I'm not experienced enough to comment on your track.
It was above average but there's definite room for improvement. I feel your work will need to feel more smooth. I'm sure you've heard some of the track(s) by the prominent UG artist(s) by now.

nyc idea for the hookz... except da auto tune is distorted in certain places... lyrics r ok bt cud improve... hookz volum wz ok bt verse volume shudve been a bit more.. u shud learn sum mixin on how 2 get ur vocals sound on top of da beat instead of "with" the beat... maybe use sum dynamic processin... i lykd da different style in da flow... bt u need to improve in swag to produce a stronger delivery... deres potential... work it...

@ tanzz : sure.....i'll work more on it..................

@Riddler: thnx man fo ur compliments.....appreciate it.....i'll try 2 improve on the areas u hav asked me to....

you're on the right path.. but lyrics need to be more coherent.. it seems to be all over the place right now. for practice just write random shit.. cuz at this point the more you write, no matter what the content is, the better you'll get. also work on your flow. keep at it =)

no offenz...verse needz MAJOR IMPROVEMENT...u prolly tried sumn new or a new tactic/method, which dint work out fo me....hook was okay...da only thyng i lyk is da fact dat da lyricz of da hook made an attempt to go deep..bt ey u can alwez get bettr..besta luck, work on ur flow...

@ Mode: ok ....I'll try dat out and lets hope it helps me.......

@Octa: SHIT....wznt expecting it wud be dat bad....but newayz ok....i'll try and improve..........

^^agree w/Octa..verse needs improvement.I see that u have emphasized on the end-punches of some lines but increase the dB of them so that the listener can distinguish it from the others.I'm not into dark hiphop so dont know what to say -_- but i digg the hooks.Don't use auto tune in ur vocals,it won't suit cus ur natural voice is well-off x)...Thank you.

@PRO: t....i used auto tune cuz i thot it wud suit the music...but, well newayz...i'll keep it in mind next time......

@ shazyr: Was that sarcasm or do u really mean it?

heyy nt bad
but ya need 2 improve.. lyk me holla at me at msn (check ur inbox)

thnx mate

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